This is a wonderful beginning - I hope you write some more of it, when you have the time. I really like the way Carlos sees people's minds before he really takes note of their bodies. And wild young Hal is awesome - already trying to work out how the world works and who he is in it.
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Date: 2008-05-09 01:43 pm (UTC)